This idea is kind of a reinvention of “Hulk” combined with “Jekyll and Hyde”, without necessarily the main character being a huge green guy who always keeps his trousers on(physicly impossible). Not that I would want to see such a thing. Nor does it have anything to do with some kind of experiment gone wrong.
Pitch:
A young man stands against an endless stream of thugs who have hunted him into a dead end alley.
His only option is to give up fear and stop running, and let his bottled up rage take over to take them down. His rage takes over his body and splits his personality in two.
The more events he remember where he chose to stand down and not intervene as these thugs terrorized people, the more power his rage gets which results in nothing but destruction in his path.
Plot:
A young man named Jim is running through the cold urban streets at night, breathing heavily as it seems he has been running for a while. He has been running from an angry mob determined to take him down for some reason. Jim then finds himself running into a dark alley to meet a dead end. The only way out is back where he came from.
As the thugs close in mocking and calling for him, not able to see him in the dark alley, Jim in fear for his life has some sort of epiphany. A dark voice whispers to him. It convinces Jim to remember all the bad things he has witnessed the thugs do to innocent people in the city. Then he takes control of Jims body, feeding on the rage Jim had been botteling up inside. This gives him super strength, making him able to take down all the thugs in the darkness of the alley, and to survive his previously inevitable doom.
As Jim steps out of the darkness it reveals his dark side, as a giant creature feeding on the thirst for revenge.
The original idea was to make the main character have some sort of altercation with the gang of thugs, but I found it would be irrelevant, because when it starts with Jim running, it’s already pretty obvious that they have. And why not start the story with some excitement?
I’m not entirely sure about the style of the animation, It can be done toony as well as realistic. The only thing that is important is that it’s dark.
So this is my pitch and plot, what do you think about it?
Hei Patrik!
Først og fremst- du skriver så spennende og beskrivende! Jeg blir drevet til å lese videre. Jeg får mange kule bilder i hodet av storyn din. Hvis dette hadde vært ei bok- så skulle jeg lest fra perm til perm.
Dette er en litt psykotisk story, som spiller på følelsene våre. Jeg liker spesielt godt det at Jims indre drama, også gjenspeiles av ytre drama (mørk gate- dead end). Du har på en måte “to historier” som skjer parallelt- og bygger opp under hverandre. Sånne mørke filmer som har både action og dybde, er veldig fine.
Du kan jo skrive storyn om igjen, med “show-dont tell”- altså som et treatment? Da kommer det jo klarere frem hvordan storyn funker som film også. Men hvis det er sånn at du ikke har umiddelbare planer om å filmatisere, men kun presentere en kul story, som du eventuelt kan jobbe videre med- så har du lykkes bra med det!
Hilsen Lisa.